OK so this one was much better actually
And what made it better in my eyes?
A ten minute timer.
It was easier to keep more focused when you need to get through something on the clock.
While not perfect; I was repeating words, considering my one shot style, I probably need an element of time pressure.
To give an example, I then performed a Poems challenge trying to remember all the rhymes. I actually seemed to perform better and sound more coherent when there was a timer on me.
I think the style is forming and, with any luck I should be able to do something with no editing whatsoever.
I seem to enjoy over-challenging myself.